One Simple Trick To Strengthen Your Copy

By Ray Edwards | August 23, 2006

Want to make your copy stronger with one simple “trick”?

Eliminate all the adverbs.

What’s an adverb?

It’s a word - often ending in the letters “ly” - that modifies a verb (or even adjectives or adverbial phrases). Examples of adverbs: quickly, instantly, amazingly, powerfully.

If you find the above passage puzzling, don’t worry about it; just go through your copy and try to eliminate as many of those “ly” words as you can. Here’s an example:

“Quickly and easily motivate clients to buy stuff.”

~ becomes ~

“Motivate clients to buy stuff.”

Now you may be tempted to ask: “But Ray, I want them to know it happens quickly and easily!”

No problem. Just be specific.

“Motivate clients to buy stuff starting the minute you install the software, without any extra effort on your part.”

You may need to do a bit of rewriting to make the copy flow without the adverbs, but your language will be stronger and more persuasive for the effort.

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7 Comments »

Comment by Dan Foley
2006-08-25 15:21:08

Ray,

That is such a good suggestion. I find myself using the “ly” words all the time and have to monitor it.

You are right that rewriting the sentence to smaller and clear statements makes the copy more effective.

Thanks!

Dan Foley

 
Comment by Ray Edwards
2006-08-25 15:50:22

For more expertise on short sentences - see the work of novelist Robert B. Parker.

 
Comment by Stephen Davies
2006-08-25 18:32:14

Excellent tip Ray!

Gotta go now… I may have some changes to make on my site ;0)

 
Comment by Darrel Hawes
2006-09-04 07:12:23

Great tip, Ray!

 
Comment by Alan Ocab
2006-09-17 04:52:25

WOW! This tip is so great Ray. I haven’t
heard this tip from any of the copywriters
out there.

Thanks.

Alan
http://www.grandstart.com

 
Comment by JEFF WELLS
2007-12-10 12:57:06

Other CRUTCH words to avoid:

- am
- are
- be
- been
- had
- has
- have
- is
- was
- were

Your writing will be more descriptive without them.
Try it.

 
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